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ubertrance

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i know my poems are kinda bad....so ill post some of them and you will be the judge lol

First one:
I'm drifting through the mist of love
To find out where my heart belongs
and as the mist cleared
i saw the sun but
with the odd shape of a face
the face of my one true love
and this sun talked to me
reading my thoughts
feeling my feelings
and then i finally knew
she was no sun
she was an angel from above
to make me happy
but at the same time
i made her happy



second one:
the feeling of thought hurts,
all of us have been burned.


but when others care,
some times we are not concerned.


the happiness is so cliché
the fact we live everyday.


to fulfill our demands
do our duty
has made us regret,
but true love comes with no sign
true love we will never forget!
 
QUOTE (ubertrance @ August 11, 2008 08:40 pm) QUOTE (Demon_Skeith @ August 11, 2008 05:56 pm) the 1st one was very good. the second was pretty good.
thanks for input......i hardly write poetry though
I only do it if I have to which is when I'm in school.
 
QUOTE (Demon_Skeith @ August 11, 2008 08:51 pm) QUOTE (ubertrance @ August 11, 2008 08:40 pm) QUOTE (Demon_Skeith @ August 11, 2008 05:56 pm) the 1st one was very good. the second was pretty good.
thanks for input......i hardly write poetry though
I only do it if I have to which is when I'm in school.
i wrote the second one in school but the first one on my own
 
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